Yes J the intro wants to be a little cryptic, I like the reader to be entertained at first but also to be able to speculate if he/she wants.

Thank you for all your notes, I'll collect them and put them at work.
Yes, it's a translation cause I want to expand outside the very conservative and closed market of my country!

So, if I understand correctly, this is a translation.  If I understand this page, Daith is the cadet who captures Deena for deportation.  The two of them have abilities, which they do not understand. The perfect system must be maintained (by them both possibly?)   The One who tries to destroy everything is the antagonist.  Who is the protagonist? Daith? Deena?  Did I get that right?   If not, we will need to reword it.  It is an exciting futuristic plot.    Is Phase Harmony the subtitle? If so, put it under  Humanity Chains, without the dash.