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吳種子chelly sponsored 100coins for Issue 13!
角色刻劃可以再描寫得更深入喔~
這就考驗文筆和技巧了~XDDD
緬因吉加油!!!~^口^
5 months agoReply
緬因吉
謝謝吳種子大大的指導，我會努力嚐試的。
5 months agoReply
海貍
我覺得角色刻劃還算細緻，只是在事件的轉折發生時還是略有欠缺。希望可以看到更明確的動機或內心狀態～
2 years agoReply
緬因吉
謝謝海貍的閱讀，我會朝這個方向去修稿，這也是我所欠缺的
2 years agoReply
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