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the dream just seems like a forced medium because it's not really interesting to have her just fall asleep as the first chapter of your story. Try a more subtle way of relaying the backstory to the reader
Ellis
What I was going for is that she always has memories instead of dreams; I got the idea from a different book I had just finished reading.
and you should explain the school scene further like who Ashton was
Ellis
Also, Ashton really is not an important character, he's just kind of there to remind her of the life she left behind.
The chapter was very exhilarating, but the beginning was a bit melodramatic. You should also change the name of the disease because I wasn't sure if it was bubonic plague of "The Plague"
Ellis
Well, this takes place in like 2060 so ummm it's not the bubonic plague. .-.
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