Yes! I want to do something like this too! (not this specific genre but a series of some kind) I'm a no0b, too, so I'm just going to stick around and see how you do it, lol
Love this story and cant wait for it to continue. What happened to the police officer? Also I find while there was some buildup to Ruby betraying it seemed like it happened really fast.
It's not done yet, I promise;) I'm gonna get around to writing more pretty soon, I have the next couple chapters mapped out. I appreciate the feedback, I'm definitely gonna explore both of those things a little bit more sometime soon
Edit: Wow, did I just forget that I already commented on this before. But did you change the Intro. Must be why I forgot.
...That being said, I'm a lot more passionate about Redfall right now.
I think I'm gonna read Glory this weekend, I just haven't had a ton of free time. I promise;)