That was a cute ending. I'm not sure how proper that kiss is, however… (I kid, I kid.)
Just some lingering thoughts: I'll be honest about the fact that sometimes the sudden time skips confused me. I would have liked to see more breaks (I think you use ~oOo~?) to signal every time skip.
If the story was longer, I would have liked to see more character development and a little more backstory. (Especially for the rumors about Pierce because they just seemed really convenient. I'm not sure how Thalassa would have heard all those rumors despite not socializing with anyone at all until she was eighteen.)
Anyway, I really enjoyed the story (despite all my criticism, sorry). It was really cute, and your characters weren't super typical or anything, so that was refreshing. Your ideas were very unique, and the world was planned out really well. Thanks for sharing this with all of us! :)
@TheGirlWhoseStillUnKnown, No problem, I'm writing a book with one of my friends and she is away at the moment without internet and I'm struggling to write Chapter five to post to Quotev on Sunday and I'm going to post chapter 3 on here on sunday as well. But I still make time to read good books like yours and in doing so I hope they will give me some ideas in what to put in mine and to make adjustments and your book gave me some very good ideas that I would like to follow. So thank you from the bottom of my heart, thanks.
Just some lingering thoughts: I'll be honest about the fact that sometimes the sudden time skips confused me. I would have liked to see more breaks (I think you use ~oOo~?) to signal every time skip.
If the story was longer, I would have liked to see more character development and a little more backstory. (Especially for the rumors about Pierce because they just seemed really convenient. I'm not sure how Thalassa would have heard all those rumors despite not socializing with anyone at all until she was eighteen.)
Anyway, I really enjoyed the story (despite all my criticism, sorry). It was really cute, and your characters weren't super typical or anything, so that was refreshing. Your ideas were very unique, and the world was planned out really well. Thanks for sharing this with all of us! :)
I cried when her sister was talking about love it was really touching
But I still make time to read good books like yours and in doing so I hope they will give me some ideas in what to put in mine and to make adjustments and your book gave me some very good ideas that I would like to follow.
So thank you from the bottom of my heart, thanks.