連結在此：【藏在泥土中的寶物】
如您所見，這是個創挑，因為想拿徽章所以就寫了哦^0^，約四千字的短篇，希望可以得到子不語的建議：故事是從掘地的現實跳到回想、再跳到發生過的事，再拉回到現實，有朋友提到這樣的寫法很亂，想知道子不語以讀者角度來看會不會真的產生閱讀困擾，如果有，我可以怎麼改進？
此外也有人提過，從昏迷到進手術室的過程缺乏過渡描寫，想知道如果是您，會如何處理？謝謝大爺了!!!^0^
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創作路上不孤獨，叔叔與「貓貓夥伴」陪伴你！
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May 2, 2025
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凌曉潔想要子不語對【藏在泥土中的寶物】的心得，在線等。
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May 2, 2025
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