Interesting read. I really liked the choice of words and sentence structure. Though not a lot hsppened, just by the way it is presented, I interested to know what changes are about to happen. I did suggest some grammartical and sentence structure changes, which I think would help the story flow much better. I hope you find them helpful.

Just went through this, okay your writing is quite complex, I battled to understand certain things. I had to sit through and digest everything carefully. Also came by a lot of words didn't know. But thanks for the vocab boost, hahahahaha. You are very well educated, it's clear. 


Try to find balance though. Have complex writing that caters for your audience. I will go through other chapters later on and comment on them.