I'm liking this so far. As you say, it is rather short, butonline books need to be on the shorter side to keep your interest. All I could say is try not to start your sentences so much with "he" - I hope you don't mind som constructive criticism! Aside from that, it's very polished...
No, I don't mind! Thanks for catching that, too. (I usually look out for repetition like that, but I completely missed it this time.) If you notice anything else, please point it out. :)